Reverb +11
I like your treatment of the melody, but there's too much reverb. It sounds like pads are stuck on, or something... it's too ethereal and yawny. Perhaps a variation in the instrument type may help-- bells, pads, and synths are all I hear-- or just dropping a great bit of reverb from the final master. It sounds like it's on the percussion; how about putting it on only the pads?
Without getting into things like keys and the such, this is a good start. Consider more work with the perc, touch up those areas, and you might really have something.